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    dots Submission Name: Melodic Dedication ~ Esadoradots
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    Author: FallenAngelJC
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    dotsMelodic Dedication ~ Esadoradots
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    Where am I?
    Ripples echo with each step I take now,
    Reflecting dazzling stars and of glowing moonlight,
    The surface only moves to the waves of my steps,
    The dark forest in the distance breaths mist upon the banks of the lake...

    What is this?
    The air which I breath sings a melody to my ears,
    Its music slows time down, till I hear my own heartbeat,
    No wait,
    Theres Two...

    Who are you?
    Hold my hand and dance with me across this moonlit lake,
    Inspire my passion,
    Intoxicate my senses,
    Instill me with freedom from one world to this world...

    How is this possible?
    In my hand, a red rose that showers red diamond dust,
    A petal drops upon the lake,
    Everything glows a gentle light,
    Let me steal a kiss...

    Oh...the answer is you...




    Submitted on 2007-07-01 09:13:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yay~ I'm going to say thank you again for this poem. Especially for that pretty picture that you recently added to it! :D

    I love it so so much~!! :D You're the best boyfriend ever!!
    | Posted on 2008-04-12 00:00:00 | by arodase | [ Reply to This ]
      This stanza is my favorite:
    "Who are you?
    Hold my hand and dance with me across this moonlit lake,
    Inspire my passion,
    Intoxicate my senses,
    Instill me with freedom from one world to this world..."

    I think this is very mysterious and mystical, a dreamlike atmosphere decorated with the beauty of the words and a soothing type of rythm that lulls you in.
    Quite a passionate writing style. Gorgeous!
    | Posted on 2007-07-01 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]



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