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    dots Submission Name: Goodbye "Daddy"dots
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    Author: bloodydreamer27
    Elite Ratio:    2.19 - 54/130/78
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Misc/I hate you
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       Getting away will be like going to heaven.


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    dotsGoodbye "Daddy"dots
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    I don't know why I cry because of you,
    Maybe it's because I miss how you used to be.
    When you told me you loved me and meant it,
    When yuo believed what I said, and didn't yell for no reason.
    What happened to him, where did he go?
    If you ever find him, call me and let me know.
    'Cause I hate who you aer now,
    I'm afraid to make you mad.
    I know that if I do you'll yell,
    And you might even try to hit me again.
    This time you might even do it,
    But if you do you'll never see me again.
    I'll get as far away from you as I can,
    And make sure that you can never find me. (like you'd try anyways)
    I know that's what you want,
    So I'll grant your wish and leave you alone to rot.




    Submitted on 2007-07-02 09:54:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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