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    dots Submission Name: Breathdots
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    Author: PryncessVynom
    ASL Info:    23/F/WV!!
    Elite Ratio:    3.35 - 1001/1073/242
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 266
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 453



    Description:
       again still can't write like i used to but again hope its at least passable
    hope you like it


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    dotsBreathdots
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    I wouldn't mind dying
    If it meant that you would to
    I wouldn't mind the pain
    If I thought it affected you
    I could bear the scars with dignity
    If they marred your perfect face
    Wouldn't mind the bitter
    If i thought you shared the taste

    I would die to cause you pain
    And love to cause your death
    Darken the light within your eyes
    Breath your dying breath




    Submitted on 2007-07-02 15:02:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      okay, it scared me a bit. don't think i'm a serious pu**y, but you seriously hate someone don't you? well, whatever...other than that, it was brilliantly written and a disturbing, though thoughtful piece of art, good work!
    | Posted on 2007-07-03 00:00:00 | by freddybuzzkill | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow
    I really love this!
    I can very much relate to this.Becasue wouldent we all go threw so many things if we new it would also affect that one person?
    I no I would
    I love the rhyeimg once again lol
    It has good flow as well
    good job

    ~safire
    | Posted on 2007-07-02 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]


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