I love it!
its great,I like the rhymeing im always a sucker for it
my fav part was
Subtle signs
Of my demise
Hid beneath my sin
Crystal shards
Of disregard
Rotting from within
I reallylike the way started the poem:
" On the edge of sanity
With nothing left to lose
Suicide is gaining ground
With nothing else to chose"
it drew me in making me want to read more. but then i really like second stanza:
"Subtle signs
Of my demise
Hid beneath my sin
Crystal shards
Of disregard
Rotting from within"
because it to me is well phrased and original. Anyways it was very short and i kinda like it that way yet at the same time i feel like it could be longer...i dont know just a thought. Anyways your flow was good. i like the rhyming. All in all it was a good write:)
Submission Name: On the Edge
