Description: Ok an explanation of this piece. I've been thinking a lot about how Christians should think of themselves. And this is what I've come up with. The idea that we died to self as soon as we accepted Christ, and now we are dead people in the world of the living. We offer death (salvation) to anyone who is willing, although few accept. I also wanted to get across the point, that living every moment for God is not easy, and most Christians never do it. It takes more sacrifice than anything else ever could, but at the end of the day, it's absolutely worth it.
So yes, it might make a bit more sense now that you've read my explanation.
Dead Man Walking -------------------------------------------
“Dead man walking”
Was their cry
“They took my father”
Was the bitter reply
Under a stiff burden
The price of obedience
If love is watching someone die
Then hate is knowing your still alive
But you made a choice
To stop now
Would be unthinkable
Humanitie's biggest folly
Thinking they could get out alive
There isn't a hope of that happening
In this red light town
Cowards try to stay above ground
While these brave few
Have already died
Alien in the lands of Now
Carrying a big red cross
They offer euthanasia
To the masses
Yellow, the lot
Living spit on the not
Dance on their graves
Deathly forgiveness hugs them right back
Frightening the daylight out
Fearful to see
In the cold glint of frigid eyes
Makes you wonder
“Dead man walking”
Was their cry
“I go to my father”
Was the deceased's reply
youre talking about some kind of execution?
i seem to remember on the green mile that when they were rehearsing for the executions someone would shout "dead man walking" or something like that...
are you also aware that there is a book called forgiving the dead man walking? which was turned into a movie called dead man walking...? im not 100% sure what it was about but somehow i remember something about a lady forgiving the man who raped her or something... im not sure...
anyways... i guess i have a lot of connotations with the title.
i think this is a little weird.
perhaps a little too vague for my liking.
the start and the end with the bookend idea is kinda cool though it would be so muhc better if i could actually grasp what it is youre saying.
at the moment im thinking the first mention of the father is someone shrieking when they see the "dead man walking" who killed their father... this is why this man must died...
the second mention at the end makes me think that the "dead man walking" found Jesus while in prison. it happens more often than not these days... its kinda interesting. theres some guy due to die in the US sometime in july i think for killing his next door neighbours and he is looking to tell a joke before he dies so he can die laughing... he promised it would be a clean joke because hes a christian now...
i cannot say any more because i cannot find anything more.
i think maybe you could be a little more... purposeful in this piece...?
it is hard to find a point of connection.
I liked this. It makes a lot of statements about human nature and death. What I noticed in particular is the point that many people (particularly Christians) look forward to life after death in heaven, but fear death. it's really quite odd when you think about it.
a few typos......
and don't apologize for being weird. weird is good....makes life interesting.