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    dots Submission Name: Breaking Downdots
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    Author: ViCiOuSWrItEr
    ASL Info:    18/Female/Desolate
    Elite Ratio:    3.97 - 890/865/108
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsBreaking Downdots
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    Dying , dying

    You do this to my every time

    Lying, lying

    I can't take this anymore

    Crying, crying

    Don't want to feel this now

    Trying, trying

    To forget about all this some how



    Why do you always get in my way

    I am ready to die today

    When will this come to an end

    I wont continue to pretend



    Sighing, sighing

    After every word you said

    I've got the barrel to my spinning head

    Ready to bleed

    I'm hanging on by just a thread.



    Why do you always get in my way

    I am ready to die today

    When will this come to an end

    I wont continue to pretend

    You gotta go

    You gotta go away today…..




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