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    dots Submission Name: Untitleddots
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    Author: LRRolins
    ASL Info:    17/A/A world you dont own
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 142/140/84
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Prose/Longing
    Total Views: 838
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 853



    Description:
       I don't thast this ish all that great,but I love to hear people have to say...

    This is,I guess,a freewrite that I wrote a couple months ago.It was the first peice I ever wrote about Cole...of which he's never seen...

    I called it "Untitled" cause :

    1 - I never named it..I just always called it "Cole".. *thinks 'how corny'* >,<

    2 - I can't think of antything..GIMME YOUR IDEARZZ CAUSE IMMA CHARGIN MAH LAZERR!!!? >,O

    God-damn,I'm such a god-dammned recluse!!

    <222

    P.S: Please don't slaughter me TOO much,mm'kay??I'm in a "sap-sap" mood today...DX


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    Shamefully
    I beat myself up for believing in something so innocent
    This thing called love had me since the beginning
    But I shied away
    and I withered away
    like a rose from sun
    I crept into darkness to protect myself
    to heal
    Time after time
    I'd brave the edge and attempt to feed
    to live
    to love
    but I was burned like a clumsy moth to the flame
    Your words
    Your person
    coaxed me out like a timid recluse with a curiousity to be filled
    I see you
    and
    I came face to face with you
    and
    I seen that you are as scared
    if not more
    than I am
    And I only wish to take you in my arms
    to comfort you
    to love you
    for all that you are
    You're everything
    ...to me




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    ||| Comments |||
      this was honestly like a blow me away thing, like if i was this moth myself, and i could not be caught on fire, not even if it was fire to kill me.

    the rose itself too.

    do you the feel this one is even finished, yourself?
    you should continue :D
    | Posted on 2008-10-08 00:00:00 | by siroez | [ Reply to This ]


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