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    dots Submission Name: Confessin : I love the Feelingdots
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    Author: LRRolins
    ASL Info:    17/A/A world you dont own
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 142/140/84
    Words: 348
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 863
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2274



    Description:
       {EDIT}
    I loved this one. I reread it a few hundred thousand times,and I only found one thing wrong with it - which I changed...which I do believe that you can tell. I think that this one is so beautiful. Much more than I had thought. And to believe I was so stupid and immature to smother it and blame it's origin on some guy. Even in the original posting you can tell that I didn't really know I wrote. It was written during a time that I experiencing God for the first time. Yes,it is true that -at the same time I wrote this- I did replay the same song over and over again and cryed about the guy that it "originally" was dedicated to. This poem is just a testament to how much I wanted to constantly know and love and experience and be with God. I was so desperate. If you have ever been a baby christian,then you know the hunger,uo know that need. Even if you have never known Christ,you feel that hunger so badly...you just don't know it. And you'll keep going,trying to fill that void that only He can fill.

    = D

    {ORIGINAL}
    Um,fear the "sap-sap"ness of Lindo-Skittle...

    This was a bit different and somewhat hard for to write...It came straight from the heart,but it's just so different to me...

    Well,embrace change...

    The "Cole-stream " just may have to stop.It's tearing me to peices..

    <222

    God,I'm so confused...Common feeling for all,I know,so leave me alone...or something...idk...


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsConfessin : I love the Feelingdots
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    I just rip myself inside out at the thought of this.
    My god,what have I gotten myself into??
    I am shocked by this turn of events.
    So this is what's it's like to be loved...

    I love the feeling

    All of my life,I held out my hands
    and stared down souls like I had all of the answers.
    I cock my head to the side as I am embraced.
    I never lived till now....

    I love the feeling

    I gave up over and over again,
    but I kept coming back for more.
    Shamefully,I guessed,my addiction to pain
    had no cure!

    I love the feeling

    Ripped my heart out,
    just to learn.
    Obiviously,you just can't teach the dumb
    within the term.

    I love the feeling

    So confused,
    I'm too cowardly to confess what I'm feeling.
    Acting like I know what I'm doing,
    I break down - bubble and spew over!!

    I love the feeling

    Lover,today,I confess...
    I laid my head to rest in fetal-grasping hands
    and cried.
    I cried and played the same song over and over.
    Time stood still,and I in repeat.

    I love the feeling

    You breathe into me
    and I open my eyes for the very first time.
    Your lips to mine,
    the bitter taste in my mouth is slain by the sweet.

    I love the feeling

    No more rhyming incantations,
    no more wishing wells.
    I found what I was looking for...
    Or maybe you found me.

    I love the feeling

    Gasping,I rise.
    It feels like it has been forever
    if not forever.
    This heaven,only I could testify this.

    I love the feeling

    Stop trying,you've done enough.
    I'm tired of denying.
    I'll open up for you
    even if I have to do myself.
    {EDIT- Take out "scapel in hand,"}
    Scapel in hand,I'll tear myself open so you can see me inside and out
    for you deserve to see every pore!!

    I love the feeling

    So this is what it's like to be loved...




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