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    dots Submission Name: Why...Why dose life take its toll on me this way..dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Rant/
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       it just seems as if we can avoid aruging with one another and we all try so dam yet we seem to run into... i suppose are long as you get through with your loved one you've really overcome the challenge.


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    dotsWhy...Why dose life take its toll on me this way..dots
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    Why..

    Why don't things ever go the way they should?
    Aren't "things" ment to follow a course of sometime?
    Here I am following my "course" so to speak day in and day out.
    I mention something so harmless so innocent
    Something that wasn't ment to bring tears to the surface
    Yet again I manage to pull it off
    The worst possbile outcome becomes my outcome.

    I long for a door I can open that will become my escape?
    I search and search but nothing... I'm empty handed

    But is this a shock to you?
    For it should not be
    Yet again fate has drawn me another lousey hand of life

    A hand I shall have become so fimilar with...




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       this makes me sad, when I am looking for a door to open I usually ask questions in my thoughts directed to the lord (um yea........sorry its called praying) and then try to forget and move on,
    mostly at a later date I will suddenly notice that I have already sub consciously gone threw the door and only then does it appear obvious.
    Anyways I thought I would share that with you,
    I hope it all works out as I'm sure it will,
    Though sometimes we can fall for along time before we understand why, and it may just be to take us to greater heights.

    Peace ~Matt
    | Posted on 2007-07-11 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]
      That was very good especially the last line, leaves a lasting definite impression. Maybe you could make a brief commentary on how to deal with how random and unpredictable life can sometimes be.
    | Posted on 2007-07-11 00:00:00 | by 7makaveli | [ Reply to This ]
      The way you wrote about this topic reached into me. I can relate...

    in a critising way i can say that it was a little bit reppetitive...

    good rant over all though...

    ~Carrie~
    | Posted on 2007-07-05 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]


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