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    dots Submission Name: Holly....I'm The One (James Bourne)dots
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    Author: Lord Bane
    ASL Info:    24/M/Isle of Wight, UK
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 40/81/50
    Words: 364
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 532
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2133



    Description:
       This is another track by Mr Bourne, written about helping a mate get a girl and regretting it....and ultimately hating the mate. No idea if this is based on a real experience


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    dotsHolly....I'm The One (James Bourne)dots
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    I'm hiding in a bush outside your window, I'm feeling sick and numb
    Fed all my best lines to my best friend so he could be the one
    But I'm a jerk because it worked, and I've just realised what I've done
    Guess I'll never be the guy to get the girl
    Set it up so that he could rock your world
    Promise me when you scream you're faking it

    Chorus 1
    Holly, I'm the one you should be dating, seeing you with him is so frustrating
    I taught him everything he knows, you fell for every single line I gave him
    And I know that I'm dumb but Holly, I'm the one

    So maybe I should just go home now and let you have your fun
    It doesn't make it any easier, I live across the street but one
    If that clown lets you down, Holly you know where to come
    Guess I could have been the guy to get the girl
    Guess I could have been the one to rock your world
    But I'm not, so I've got to face it

    Chorus 2
    Holly, I'm the one you should be dating, seeing you with him is so frustrating
    I taught him everything he knows, he's just a fraud cos I'm the guy who made him
    And I know that I'm dumb but Holly, I'm the one

    I can't believe you're at my door cos he confessed that he'd been cheating
    Suddenly, a chance for me to tell the secret I've been keeping

    (I am the one x3
    Holly, I'm the one
    I am the one x2)

    You said you valued his integrity, and honesty is rare
    He swore to you he'd never cheat again, he cried and said he cared
    Well he's a jerk because it worked

    Chorus 3
    Holly, I'm the one you should be dating, seeing you with him is so frustrating
    I taught him everything he knows, he used to be my best friend now I hate him
    And it sucks that he won, cos he's a dick and you're amazing
    And I know that I'm dumb but Holly, I'm the one




    Submitted on 2007-07-05 13:51:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think it's good, but I have a question

    Why are you posting this?

    After perusing your profile, most of the stuff you post is someone elses.

    I like that you're interested, but I'd like to see some more of YOUR work.

    Wishing for more
    ~Brian
    | Posted on 2007-07-05 00:00:00 | by Imadjinn | [ Reply to This ]


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