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    dots Submission Name: Sleepless Nights (Re-Made)dots
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    Author: PrincessOfDark
    ASL Info:    17/F/Tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.2 - 22/31/25
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 777
    Average Vote:    3.0000
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    dotsSleepless Nights (Re-Made)dots
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    I can't sleep at night
    Always kept awake with thoughts of you running through my head
    What if?
    What would have happened if I had done something different?
    Was it something I did?
    Was it something I said?
    One year of this sleepless abyss
    I crave sleep
    I long for it
    Yet it does not come
    Just to get your face out of my head
    For your laugh that's still ringing in my ears to disappear

    Counting to a hundred more than twice
    Singing myself to sleep
    None of it works
    Still no sleep

    I feel lost
    And confused inside
    Like there is something missing
    Something I can't get back
    Something I will never get back

    Is this feeling the feeling of true love?
    Love so strong it keeps me awake for countless hours at night?

    Sleep won't come
    All because of you
    My loyalty must be greater than I thought
    Because I am still hung up on you
    Even after a year has passed




    Submitted on 2007-07-05 16:24:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this one is even better. wow! and the spelling worked!!! lol. n e ways good work. and when you can't sleep try doing what i do. slam your head off of the wall and knock urself out!!! jk. i just put on some muzik that puts me to sleep... it always worked for me.
    | Posted on 2008-01-17 00:00:00 | by Darc Angel | [ Reply to This ]
      Very deep and it bitters my anger after 27 views not one person could leave a simple comment...This site says so much of its struggle on the commenting issue, and you have so many of the people that agree to it, but where of it is it happening to the ones that need it the most. Maybe this poem isn't understanding? Or perhapes outstanding to their perspective? It doesn't matter...They'll probably just leave you a constructive note that you don't really want to here, after all your request is thoughts...And here are my thoughts...I see myself in it alot...Depression can makes very sleepless, and you know as well as I, nights can be very very long, longer than days, and the tragedy about being hopeless and sleepless is that your all alone throughout the nights with the most hurtfull thing...Yourself...Your mind can hurt you, it can grasp you, it can take you, and conform you to believe that you are this curse and every other horrible thing you may call upon yourself...You begin to go insane and such things as drug abuse, cutting, even attempts come to play...This poem touched me as well as it broke my heart...But I want you to remember...There is something that you will probably not agree on me with...We are all beautiful...Every person inside of this world does not have a lack of beauty, that hides within side of them...This poem almost made me cry...
    | Posted on 2007-08-15 00:00:00 | by Crestfallenman | [ Reply to This ]


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