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    dots Submission Name: you saydots
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    Author: truthbetold
    ASL Info:    20-f
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 38/45/33
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Lyrics/What you did
    Total Views: 883
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1129



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       someone said it souded like a free style rap song haha and they thought it was funny too what do you think??


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    dotsyou saydots
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    you say you love me......not!
    you say you care......not!
    you we'll be together
    then quit screwin with other girls!
    get a grip and spare me
    leave me with my dignity
    you made my life bad already by lying to me


    which was wrong of you to do
    and i'm telling you we're through
    so quit wasting my time
    i'll put you back in line
    i don't need this right now
    and niether do you
    you'll have nothing left
    when i'm through with you


    i'll chew you out
    and kick your m-effin "a"
    but i got to be honest
    i don't rock that way
    im sorry u put this on yourself you see
    this is what happens when you mess with me
    i ain't trying to be rude
    but c'mon dude
    you deserve what you got
    huh hot shot!!

    too many times i cried over you
    everytime you met someone new
    whatever i'm done, i'm over it, finito!
    and all i gotta say is you gotta go!!




    Submitted on 2007-07-05 19:56:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      your writing reminds me of someone else... look her up, her 'alias' is xSaraHx, but she's all over my page. she'll tell you why. anyway, this wasn't my favorite, but still not bad. i don't like the way you used slangy words like 'dude'. also, it gets on my nerves when people say 'effin'. alot. you seemed to have sacrificed some thoughtful lyrics for a rhyme. it's like trading love for sex, you try to keep both, but the love's more important.
    | Posted on 2007-07-05 00:00:00 | by freddybuzzkill | [ Reply to This ]
      Hahaha!! I love it!! I wrote something and said something along these lines to my bf of 2 yrs!! This was fantastic the emotions of anger was very strong! I love it!!
    Now i hAVE TO SAY YOU ARE STILL VERY YOUNG AND YOU will find someone better someone who will treat you right and make you smile and laugh endlessly. when you do dont let him get away! trust me you will regret it later. Anyways just have fun for now while you are young! Anyways great write!
    | Posted on 2007-07-05 00:00:00 | by EL | [ Reply to This ]


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