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    dots Submission Name: heavy metal and hellerdots
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    Author: emo-tastic
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 571/566/128
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsheavy metal and hellerdots
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    frozen pizzas and eggo waffles
    you run interference
    and I overhear some
    offhand confession
    recognition

    sparklers are lit all at once
    we trade secrets for hits
    but I don't want you
    any higher above me
    than you already are

    heavy metal and catch-22
    I wish your friends weren't so shrill
    you put me in your room
    and leave me there
    repetition

    patio lights breed pacified discussion
    I have something to tell you
    we are both omniscient
    stop moving
    disjoint




    Submitted on 2007-07-05 22:54:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this piece of work, It could be used for poetry and lyrics as well. All of us can improve upon ideas, but sometimes it's better to leave a piece alone, because it best describes what you were feeling at the time.
    | Posted on 2007-07-07 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]


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