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    dots Submission Name: Wild Creatordots
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    Author: Agent V.
    ASL Info:    23/girl/small town
    Elite Ratio:    7.23 - 38/29/24
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 894
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    Description:
       I do not know why I haven't written in awhile. I've had no drive except the curiosity of why not? So I present another odd magnetic poetry piece in hopes to push me to produce something real.


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    dotsWild Creatordots
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    Wild Creator,

    Investigate a piece of me.
    Appear, imagine an
    electric fashion symbol
    absurdly deep in passion performing a metaphor
    through black and white rhythm.

    (but smoke him to harmony
    and have our smear in you if only for free)

    Why let a masterpiece be empty and surreal
    feeling every angel mount us like silhouettes?
    Angry at time you scream about balance
    and our aesthetic art.

    We paint a mess of wasted music
    and drug write from experiments
    with expensive cameras and second-rate film
    our finished product is nothing more
    than a broken shard of intimacy.




    Submitted on 2007-07-06 13:31:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Why let a masterpiece be empty and surreal
    feeling every angel mount us like silhouettes?
    Angry at time you scream about balance
    and our aesthetic art.

    We paint a mess of wasted music
    and drug write from experiments
    with expensive cameras and second-rate film
    our finished product is nothing more
    than a broken shard of intimacy.



    A bit of a dim view of writing, eh? Or an accurate assessment of the process itself, black and white imagery embedded on the screen of the word processor or tablet accompanied by 'images' taken from life and memory. It seems inevitable that the 'camera' or inspiration will always be more beautiful than the 'second rate film' we commit to paper.

    Ah, well...

    Take care.
    Bill.
    | Posted on 2007-07-07 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really unique. I'm not sure I understand it fully in the way you meant me to. The last stanza is very clear, and I really like the message you send there. It's so true; everyone cheats at being creative and the result is not so great. However, the images in the first three stanzas don't seem as connected, but I might be looking at everything the wrong way. Speaking of images, the ones you use are very powerful even if I don't understand exactly how they fit in. I especially like, "feeling every angel mount us like silhouettes?" Angel symbolism is really over done, but this is refreshingly unique. Overall, this was a very well written poem.
    | Posted on 2007-07-06 00:00:00 | by vegetable | [ Reply to This ]


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