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    dots Submission Name: Summer Lovindots
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    Author: Hip-Hop Honey
    ASL Info:    16/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 105/86/31
    Words: 181
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 743
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1091



    Description:
       I wrote this in a spurr of the moment type thing! Hope you like it!


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    dotsSummer Lovindots
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    Living a lie or
    Awake in a dream
    Don't know how to stand
    Inbetween whats real an make believe
    Good Time memories consiming me
    But I know he's to good for me
    I see it everytime he looks at me
    I'll love you til my last dying breath
    Is what he told me
    Baby girl your all I need to be with me at night
    Someone by my side to ride
    He says this and more
    My heart is yours
    It took my breath away everytime
    And now I have no place
    To run and hide
    My ladies know what I mean
    But I can't deny
    What I am feeling
    Pushing aside the fact
    Shhh...
    Got my homeboys feeling me
    But to wrap this up
    He got me feeling things I've never felt before
    Twistin and grindin
    Smokin Mary jane getting high as the sky
    My eyes getting teary
    Oh here we go
    I've let it all go
    And they know
    He's what I'm asking for
    Shout out to my Dawg
    B-rad and Mo fo sho!




    Submitted on 2007-07-07 00:33:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i'm sorry, i have trouble taking this kind of rap seriously. that being said, this really wasn't that bad! some of the words make me giggle, but then again, i'm a skinny white boy with long blonde hair. i think this had great rhyming, and it's about something important to you. when you write passionately, you get the best results! also, sometimes spur-of-the-moment writes turn out truly great. i definately underestimated you. i'd like to here this as a song. it would have to be pretty ganksta though! lol. also, i have only one rap on this site, and it's both political and hardcore, but i'd appreciate your thoughts on it. it's called 'bloodsuckers'. thanks!
    | Posted on 2007-07-07 00:00:00 | by freddybuzzkill | [ Reply to This ]


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