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    dots Submission Name: my busted religion bodydots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsmy busted religion bodydots

    i want to begin all my endings,
    say all my smiled goodbyes,
    stop all the clocks
    & move on
    into the slippery universe
    that i am
    my bluish hands
    gripping the vivid tongue of moon
    above me
    pulling until the silver thread of life
    snaps from my busted religion body

    i catalogue every passing day
    as to remind myself
    that i am alive

    to have know
    & to have been known
    is both the curse
    & the blessing
    of the living

    Submitted on 2007-07-07 03:05:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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