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    dots Submission Name: the muscle for the fleshdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsthe muscle for the fleshdots
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    i've been told
    to leave the past behind me.
    yet i've never been convinced
    that that is where it goes.

    & i often wander about
    the small gods of my brain
    & try to hear what they are saying.
    hoping that if i could hear
    just one glowing fragment of a sentence
    i could cure the cancers of my life forever.

    when every inch of your body
    is a lie,
    it's hard to see the muscle for the flesh.




    Submitted on 2007-07-07 03:06:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ooo, i like the imagery metaphor. and the symbol is hard for a lot of ppl to use and have it seem natural, it seems to work well for you. and u even got punctuation in so its not like reading a giant sentence thats randomly broken up. woot, so few ppl do that. i give you koodoes for the write, but must say some of your others still top it.
    | Posted on 2007-07-07 00:00:00 | by Adden Lee | [ Reply to This ]


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