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    dots Submission Name: rendered breechlessdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsrendered breechlessdots
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    i wonder why the sky has been so perfect
    for the last two months.
    it started around the same time
    that the death goddess emerged
    from that black, silky cocoon of hers.

    & i wonder if i've slipped
    into some other reality
    where all the wet weather
    & cartoon clouds,
    like a magnet,
    cling to me
    like the moist fingers of flowers.

    perhaps its an omen
    from the ice queen
    guiding me home
    with the lighthouse
    of her middle eye.

    i'm ready to be rendered breechless.

    as of yet,
    i'm still untouched by the poverty
    that life provides
    for i have very little bitterness in me
    & have loved so much.




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