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    dots Submission Name: my tatterdemallion feetdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsmy tatterdemallion feetdots
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    i only exist
    in the states that i exist
    of which i am.
    but i'm surrounded
    by rounded facades
    that are sharper than they seem

    as if in dream,
    an ego of lake
    was there for the drowning.

    the dead eat their own
    until they're dead again.

    thus nature takes a curious course
    while the winding path of evil
    is a serpent.

    i tromp through the brush
    near the outer wall of life,
    not so busted as i thought,
    as the future creeps its way
    beneath my tatterdemallion of feet
    & the birds passage
    remove their trees
    to sing me along.

    i lollip around the forests
    like a fool,
    in which i am,
    gladly and with such splendor of flower.




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