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    dots Submission Name: the whispers around your facedots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsthe whispers around your facedots
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    seeing you sitting there
    with your face all spangled
    with copperpots
    & bones that jangle
    like the witch doctor that you are.

    the first thing that i noticed about you
    was the deep, earthy brown
    beneath the winter snow of your eyes.

    now i watch as the whispers
    around your face
    recede into the visible
    as time rebuilds
    & we rebuild time
    to fit the circumstances
    that we want to remember.




    Submitted on 2007-07-07 03:11:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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