Description: can one of you guys help me figure out a title for this??? please???
cuts of tomorrow -------------------------------------------
drowning in the past
and the mistakes of my decisions
reaching for the blade
so i can make my last incision
watching blood flow out
of these cuts upon my soul
longing for the future
and a past that once was whole
living for tomorrow
because i cant live for today
wishing there was something
to make this feeling go away
doing all i can
to make the world right for you
trying to always be there
because thats what you used to do
trying not to worry
about how your life is now
still not understanding
all the Who's and What's and How's
trusting your mistakes
to work themselves out in the end
so when we're happy together
there is nothing to pretend
drying my eyes from pain
because you told me to be strong
doing everything you say
because perfect is not wrong
I really like this poem.
It really describes how one cutter feels.
The only thing I didn't really like
is that it really doesn't have an ending.
I think you could've added so much more
to really make it stand out.
Still a good write.
I can't give you a title hun', it must come out of your own heart and soul. The title is within you, but you must decide what best sums up what you are describing mentally, emotionally and even spiritually. You'll find the title soon enough, but I don't think any of us could ever do as well as you to come up with a good title. These are your thoughts and passions.
I personally think this poem was not too shabby, yes it is on the emo side of things but its still pretty cool. So anyways as far as tittles go maybe something like No Tomorrow or "Cuts of Tomorrow" or "Our Tomorrow" or "Tomorrow Today" or Tomorrow of Yesterday" or "Yesterday's Tomrrow" I dunno those are just some thoughts just because you seem to really be stuck in the past in this poem but trying to reach for tomorrow and it seems your today seems to be more of a focus on tomorrow instead of today. maybe im reading to much into it all but these are my thoughts, well i hoped that helped:) Take care and Cheer up!
first off, let me say that 'ron cole' suggested a really emo name. then again, i found the poem rather emo, itself. don't cut. the rhyming wasn't bad, and it, other than what i said earlier, seemed to have enough relevance to be important. anyway, i'd like to suggest a simpler, one word name, like either "Cuts" or "Perfect".