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    dots Submission Name: "Bad persons"dots

    Author: AutumnLeaves
    ASL Info:    26/f/ Cyprus
    Elite Ratio:    4.62 - 95/103/44
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dots"Bad persons"dots

    Bad persons.
    Is this how we call them?
    We know the word “persons”.
    The word “bad” is what touches suspicion.
    Tomorrows are full with persons.
    Strangers who become the faces of momentary reflection.
    Strangers who become the faces of endless contemplation.
    The mind stumbles when “bad” enters.
    Yet wholeness in this never enters.
    It remains somewhere
    Beyond the flickering substance,
    Beyond the concrete truth.
    “Bad” is not enough.
    Should I call you bad and get it over with?
    Should you call me bad
    And sigh with disdained affection?
    Deprived wholeness darkens the scenery of thoughts.
    Let me be bad and get it over with.
    Define me as most dictionaries do
    Vicious, or malicious.
    But can you get it over with?
    Deprived wholeness
    Darkens the scenery of thoughts,
    And you are lost.
    Within persons, strangers, life.
    You knew them once,
    But now they’re bad.
    afternoon smiles,
    Private gazing ways
    “I love the way your fingers sway”.
    And suddenly they’re bad.
    Like rushing rain on a summer’s day.
    A change of dress.
    Yellow, with a slight hint of black.
    Silence merged with sun.
    Is “bad” ever enough?

    Submitted on 2007-07-07 16:08:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a good reflective piece on society in general and it questions our individualistic ideas of how we address the people we meet in life. it is good that you raise this question of bad rather than say looks as it makes a person think deeper than just superficial aspects of a person. anyway i think its good because its a different style of writing and proclaims its message powerfully and clearly. so good work.
    | Posted on 2007-07-08 00:00:00 | by Tomato | [ Reply to This ]

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