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    dots Submission Name: Mysticism II: Lover's Moondots
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    Author: Porcelaine
    ASL Info:    27/F/Croatia
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 880/703/256
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsMysticism II: Lover's Moondots
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    I do not long to feel

    The chill of your iron

    Nor the silence

    Beneath your rage dilating depths

    I long to taste you

    To the essence of my sweet forbidden wish.

    And take you to a pilgrimage…

    Where the seas spurt together

    A fountain of kashmere

    And the Earth moves quietly beneath our feet,

    In the absence of a sleepless night

    At last

    It takes me far

    …takes me so… far…

    As to find you standing somewhere

    …aching…

    Tempted to feel me,

    Wanting to hurt me,

    Ravage my body back into Hades,

    And push me back to the brink

    Of your kingdom's shadow

    You know I hear your thoughts

    Your longing for my blood

    I see…

    Lover's moon rising...

    I see you...

    Abrupt...

    As your cold lines change…

    Pass the midnight

    As you finally arrive tired

    But hungry

    The force of your need...

    Ruptures and...

    All is left...

    In …GREED…!




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      wow....so dark and subtly erotic. the imagery is solely unique. i am most impressed. more please.....
    | Posted on 2007-07-09 00:00:00 | by treybur | [ Reply to This ]
      A most compelling though entirely outre piece of verse! Full of your signature classic poetic phraseology, the reader is carried along almost in spite of himself to the last surprising line!! bravo ... bravo ... bravo ... micahel
    | Posted on 2007-07-09 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      i normally do not enjoy dark poetry but this one was different and a pleasant to read..surprisingly too close to home.

    This verse certainly shocked me and I enjoyed reading it..

    Good read!

    Thanks for writing it.

    - v
    | Posted on 2007-07-08 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]
      A mixture of fantasy and darkness...romance and passion...your talent seems to grow Miss Porcelaine...I am indeed envious...

    The way you use your words seem to paint pictures of romance but yet of darkness...a very hard thing to pull off when you add passion to it with fantasy as a background...

    I do look sooo much forward to more of your work...
    | Posted on 2007-07-08 00:00:00 | by FallenAngelJC | [ Reply to This ]


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