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    dots Submission Name: Knife To My Throatdots
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    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 208
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 416
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1220



    Description:
       Looks Like Im Going Back To My Old Style Of Suicidal Writing
    All i gott Say is happyness Dont Last Foreva So Enjoy it While It lasts


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    dotsKnife To My Throatdots
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    im broken and confused
    with nothing left to lose
    my hearts in peices
    im going insane
    cant stand to be alone
    i hate everything i am now
    im looking for the easiest way out
    now you have a new girlfriend
    there is no room for me anymore
    making life even more pointless
    then i thought before
    im sick of the people
    who lie to my face
    sick of the guys
    who think they can score
    because i dont give a fuck anymore
    im sick of trying to better myself
    it hurts to think just how happy i could have been
    if only i was perfect
    and didnt look the way i do
    if only i didnt speak up when something was wrong
    its such a laughable concept
    to think that i was happy with you
    when u obviously wernt with me
    the past few weeks
    death has been on my mind
    with nothing to live for
    only reasons to cry
    i want to give up on the world i know
    there is nothing left for me anymore
    so dont be suprised if you get a call
    saying that the girl who's heart you broke
    gave up on life with a knife to her throat





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    ||| Comments |||
      I don't think I've read a poem as full of wrath and loathing as yours. It flowed really well. One line going perfectly into the next. Just a few mistakes. But those can be very easily revised.
    Katana
    | Posted on 2007-07-08 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]


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