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    dots Submission Name: Lies And Heart Breakdots
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    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 211
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 603
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1180



    Description:
       He Gave Me My Life Back
    Gave Me A False Sense Of Security
    Made Me Feel As If He Loved And Cared About Me
    Then RIPPED It All From Underneath Me


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    you saved me
    picked me up when i fell
    brought me back into this life
    which i thought was hell
    you held my hand when things got tough
    you were my light when times were dark
    you gave a false sense of hope
    set me up for a bigger fall then before
    look at me im not fine
    theres not been a day in the past two months
    that i havent cried
    you told me you were diffrent to the rest
    you got upset everytime i proved you were no diffrent
    all those sweet lies you told me
    all your tears i wiped away
    i guess it meant nothing cause look at us today
    your living it up new girls in your life
    im all alone crying at night
    what happend to us
    i thought things were great but
    you never did explain exactly why
    you decided to break my heart that night
    i asked you to look in my eyes
    and tell me you didnt love me
    and you couldnt even do that
    but you expect me to move on
    im sorry but its not that easy
    out of all the lies you ever told
    i love you is the one id love to hear again






    Submitted on 2007-07-08 04:31:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i agree with the above comment...very moving. i personally haven't been through this either, but it's a fear, especially at the start of a new relationship...hell, during any part of a relationship it's always in the back of your mind. great job on the poem, and caputuring the feelings. you'll find teh one you're meant for...it'll take time, but you'll find him.
    | Posted on 2007-07-09 00:00:00 | by psalm305 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very moving poem. I haven't been through anything like what you have, but I can understand it better after reading this. I hope you get some happiness in your life, you deserve it :)
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    | Posted on 2007-07-08 00:00:00 | by Lord Bane | [ Reply to This ]


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