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Shift, Dodge.

Author: SlanderousLust
ASL Info:    21/Q/Four inches from you
Elite Ratio:    5.15 - 89 /137 /74
Words: 76
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Shift, Dodge.

that's me. I'm a fraud.

I blaspheme,
I'm a self righteous whore, a slut.

My integrety is a piece of filament,
Bright, but it breaks under pressure.

I'll love you, untill sex becomes boredom.
After that I'll still love, love the idea of you.

I'm unspecified, a blur of reason to be interpreted at will.

I am flat
I am the shifty eyes
I am the way you dodge me...

Submitted on 2007-07-08 10:24:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i promise i have been trying to comment on this since you posted it. and i am still trying. and i just cannot.

there is something about your writing and voice that is so radically different from most everything else i read that stumps me. it overwhelms me and i cannot make sense of my own thoughts/response.

defence mechanism is all i have here.
this is someones way of defending themselves... from the past... from the present... from the potential of the past to become the present/future...

when all you have is a physical connection its bound to get boring soon enough i guess...

the way you play with images and dance around the topic messes with me. i cannot decide whether they think its a good thing or not... whether this piece comes from a veiw point of self esteem or whether its a complete lack thereof.

i like the way you have put the last line in bold. the way the last stanza works up to the bold last line but this:

I'm unspecified, a blur of reason to be interpreted at will.

is all i am doing with this piece... finding an excuse to interpret some little sign that prolly says nothing more than 'move along please'

| Posted on 2007-07-10 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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