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    dots Submission Name: the real herodots
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    Author: Cherub Winter
    ASL Info:    21/m/IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 17/20/11
    Words: 229
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 890
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       for private joshua priester, leaves for iraq in august of 2007. keep him in your prayers, the world needs him.


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    dotsthe real herodots
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    Cold is the breeze that drifts us apart
    I can't watch you go, it's breaking my heart
    The other set of footprints that wouldn't let me die
    Carried me through the darkness of change, and inspired me to try
    I could swear you are my gaurdian, never leaving my side
    To follow me to the depths and keep my head above the tide
    The most important lesson you taught me was to fight for myself
    Because one day I will have to, when there is left but no one else

    I'm proud to see now, that we can stand alone
    Dedicated to serve, and stronger we have grown
    This wasn't our dream, but it is what we choose
    With nothing left to gain, and nothing left to lose

    I see it in the eyes of the people I meet
    They give praise, thanks, when they see us on the street.
    And it makes me proud to know you
    Because you are doing what no one else will do
    So people can say what they will,
    and say what they wish
    They can call you a failure, they can call you a piece of shit
    But its your sacrifice that gives them the right to say it
    Take care of yourself brother, I hope you always know
    I keep you in my prayers, you are my hero




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      You're closer than family to me. My true brother in arms. I wouldn't be here without you. We've been through the [censored] storm and back man.

    Thank you for this poem. It means more to me than you'll ever know. Take care of yourself brother. I'll see you soon before I go.
    | Posted on 2007-07-19 00:00:00 | by spacedoutboy | [ Reply to This ]


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