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    dots Submission Name: Slips Awaydots
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    Author: Euphoria
    ASL Info:    19/M/WCU
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 37/25/31
    Words: 430
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 558
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2845



    Description:
       Basically just if you want somthing, do what you can to have it. Letting somthing go that you want, never works out in the long run.


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    Verse

    Six years gone and memory remains
    Of what life was like when
    There was no tension or strain
    Between me and my friend
    But I made a single wrong move
    By listening to the words of
    Contradicting ideas and moods
    Not to my love
    Since then I have this within
    But with my mouth shut
    I scream that I am living in sin
    But you donít know for what
    Because I act just like itís alright
    But still I hear this voice
    Every day and every night
    I just hear it

    Chorus

    Youíll just let it all slip away
    (Iím telling you that)
    Your grip loosens as you lose your way
    (Iím telling you that)
    If you care for something you have
    (Iím telling you that)
    You need to follow your hearts path

    Verse 2

    Still six years gone and memory remains
    Of what it could have been
    If I had just done it my way
    Instead of listening
    Yet we all live and we learn
    Thanks to all the things
    That we watch crash and then burn
    As the bells ring
    Time moves and it fades as it passed
    And as it moves on
    My chances are dwindling fast
    And they will soon be gone
    Iím pretty sure what Iím doing is right
    But still I hear this voice
    Every day and every night
    I just hear it

    Chorus

    Youíll just let it all slip away
    (Iím telling you that)
    Your grip loosens as you lose your way
    (Iím telling you that)
    If you care for something you have
    (Iím telling you that)
    You need to follow your hearts path
    (If you donít then)
    Youíll just let it all slip away
    (Iím telling you that)
    Your grip loosens as you lose your way
    (Iím telling you that)
    If you care for something you have
    (Iím telling you that)
    You need to follow your hearts path
    (So it doesnít)

    Bridge

    Slip
    Away
    It just

    Drifts
    Away
    Why does it always

    Slip
    Away
    I know itís gonna

    Drift
    Away
    As it fades to

    Black
    Again
    Thereís never turning

    Back
    Again
    For the time it
    Slips
    Away
    Just like it always

    Slips
    Away

    Outro

    Slip
    Away
    Donít let it all
    Slip
    Away
    Why does it all
    Slip
    Away
    I must not let it
    Slip
    Away
    But every day it will
    Slip
    Away
    Till soon enough its
    Slipped
    Away
    Because I let it
    Slip




    Submitted on 2007-07-08 17:04:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is really good. How someone can regret something years later. It's like Face Down by The Red Jumpsuit Apparatus. Well, the way I read it it is. Starts out slow and then goes screamo.
    Katana
    | Posted on 2007-07-08 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]


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