Thank You by Katana Ryoko

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Author:	Katana Ryoko
ASL Info:	17/F/Cali
Elite Ratio:	2.86 - 483/428/109
Words:	83

Class/Type:	Poetry/What you did
Total Views:	206
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	527

Description:
The poem explains it all.

Thank You dots

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I'm getting over you, baby boy
The pain I had when you left
Is slowly not becoming an issue
Someone else is taking control
Of this beautiful heart you left behind
You should see the transformation
That you caused to happen in my life
My eyes are opened to this girl
Someone intelligent and pretty
That I didn't see in the mirror before
I feel this wonderful confidence
Because of you I have found it
And for that I must say thank you

Submitted on 2007-07-08 18:46:56 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like this. It's short and sweet but it gets the point across very well. when i read it, i feel it has a calm tone kind of. and that calm tone puts more emphasis on the suggestion that the speaker went through some troubles but is now ok. i'm not sure if i'm explaining it right. ha i'm having some problems explaining what i mean. but i hope what i said makes sense to you. overall, i like this and i think it ends at just the right moment.
| Posted on 2007-07-13 00:00:00 | by EileenToTheLeft | [ Reply to This ]
  Jacoby reversed himself there. "Turning a positive into a negative"? I think he meant to change word order a bit, but in any case, I'll agree with him for the rest of it.

It's good to see a bit of your old optimism shining through.

--crimson
| Posted on 2007-07-13 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]
  Taking a positive and making it into a negative. Very admiriable. I am myself making a big effort to be optimistic about things recently - life, love, work, all the usual crap haha. It's so easy to become disillusioned and depressed, so it's nice to see someone else taking the same stance as me for once. Yay for you.

I like how this is written as if it's been poured out of you - no punctuation, just free falling emotion and new realisations. Tis very liberating to read and kinda made me want to applaud when i'd finished.

Thanks for sharing your work.

Peace,
Jaco

| Posted on 2007-07-11 00:00:00 | by Jacoby | [ Reply to This ]
  it's always nice to find that Strong Confident Woman inside, isn't it? Sadly, it usually takes something heart wrenching for us to find it, but none the less, it was indeed there to be found. Sometimes we dont know exactly how strong we really are until we are tested, but in the end we grow from that, walking away feeling refreshed or somewhat reborn.

I'm glad that you found that, though the reason that you did wasn't a pleasant experience I'm sure.

take care
| Posted on 2007-07-09 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]

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