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    dots Submission Name: Contradictiondots
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    Author: Shadows Life
    Elite Ratio:    4.4 - 127/127/27
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       i really dont know what i was thinking when i wrote this piece, i guess i was trying to relay the contradicitions in this world by painitng such a confusing and contradictory frame of mind. I hope u enjoy this :)


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    Silence makes its way across the room
    inspired by the sounds of nothingness
    the air is dank with emptiness
    but does anybody care?

    Whispers not yet uttered
    linger on in solitude
    Rage shackled deep within
    patiently waits to be let out....

    Dredges of sanity
    drive me to the fray
    Chaos calming from within
    bids me to pray.

    The dark is my comfort
    in the warmth it brings
    memories forced upon me.
    reflections of things yet to come.

    confusion is my haven
    and ignorance my bliss
    but still knowledge lingers
    a white knight seeking to wreak havoc...

    I fight back with fire
    to conquer serentiyt
    but madness slowly fades
    I surrender to calamity

    Now the fight is done
    iI acquiese my victory
    The future cannot be changed
    But there's always history.




    Submitted on 2007-07-09 00:58:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Sorry about the triple commenting my computer is messed up
    | Posted on 2007-07-18 00:00:00 | by Crestfallenman | [ Reply to This ]
      Very beautiful form of writing here, I applaud you on your poem here. I like the very first paragraph. "Silence makes its way across the room
    inspired by the sounds of nothingness
    the air is dank with emptiness
    but does anybody care?" Does anybody care? It is hard to believe that anybody cares about us in our darkest stages of life. They move on in life, you are suddenly ignored, and left with these feelings. I see a lot of vengence inside of your writing here, I see a lot of things you want to conquer out of your silent requiem. As you fight back with fire. I'm adding this to my favorites.
    | Posted on 2007-07-18 00:00:00 | by Crestfallenman | [ Reply to This ]
      Very beautiful form of writing here, I applaud you on your poem here. I like the very first paragraph. "Silence makes its way across the room
    inspired by the sounds of nothingness
    the air is dank with emptiness
    but does anybody care?" Does anybody care? It is hard to believe that anybody cares about us in our darkest stages of life. They move on in life, you are suddenly ignored, and left with these feelings. I see a lot of vengence inside of your writing here, I see a lot of things you want to conquer out of your silent requiem. As you fight back with fire. I'm adding this to my favorites.
    | Posted on 2007-07-18 00:00:00 | by Crestfallenman | [ Reply to This ]
      Very beautiful form of writing here, I applaud you on your poem here. I like the very first paragraph. "Silence makes its way across the room
    inspired by the sounds of nothingness
    the air is dank with emptiness
    but does anybody care?" Does anybody care? It is hard to believe that anybody cares about us in our darkest stages of life. They move on in life, you are suddenly ignored, and left with these feelings. I see a lot of vengence inside of your writing here, I see a lot of things you want to conquer out of your silent requiem. As you fight back with fire. I'm adding this to my favorites.
    | Posted on 2007-07-18 00:00:00 | by Crestfallenman | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I really like how you portrayed contradictions almost beautifully. The images you give off are quickly contradicted by another image and therefore they change completely, and very quickly. And you are quite right, life is exactly like that, just when you start to get comfortable it throws something else at you to knock you off guard. Itís really clever how youíve done that.

    Sorry I canít elaborate more.
    Great write,

    *~xXxLinzixXx~*
    | Posted on 2007-07-09 00:00:00 | by Linzi | [ Reply to This ]


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