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    dots Submission Name: Prelude to a Summertime Tragedydots
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    Author: doppelganger
    ASL Info:    26/f/your brain
    Elite Ratio:    1.98 - 34/223/160
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Dark
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    dotsPrelude to a Summertime Tragedydots
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    I can wait in the shadows and perceive things as they are
    Bleeding eardrums and all honey
    This novel entertainment isn't as soothing as we thought tonight
    Quick! Rewind! Nevermind, it's too late.

    Let's just do this anyway, we might as well.
    Wash your hands, those neon lights illuminate
    Your heavy eyes make me nervous, love
    It's getting dark

    I can fall over from malnourishment and forget this was my doing
    150milligrams of nothing feel good, darling
    This haze I'm in makes it all so fucking glamorous but it's still so dirty
    Listen! Ha ha! Oh I don't know, I'm losing it.

    Let's just do this anyway, we might as well.
    Wash your hands, those neon lights illuminate
    Your heavy eyes make me nervous, love
    It's getting dark

    Running out of time
    Doing all we can to be scarred
    Running out of prayers
    What are we doing here?
    Running out of time
    Doing all we can to be scarred
    Running out of...
    Running out of...
    Running out of prayers!





    Submitted on 2007-07-09 02:45:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i liked the last stanza for some reason...just the wording.
    | Posted on 2007-07-18 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]


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