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    dots Submission Name: my deathdots

    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 249
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       i think im going crazy
    my writing is worse then it was before
    and this time in not writing about bullshit feelings what im writing is exactly how i feel and right now i want nothing more then to put a knife to my wrist and carve his name

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    dotsmy deathdots

    see this knife in my hand
    see the gash across my arm
    you cause all of this
    you tore me out of a happy world
    broke my heart, mind and soul
    taught me that love meant nothing

    the more i think about you
    the deeper i dig the knife in
    i never thought i could hate you
    as much as i do right now

    i dont feel any pain as i start on the other arm
    its just another form of beauty
    just another fucking scar
    would you really care
    if i accidently cut to deep
    if i couldnt stop the bleeding
    died in a puddle of blood at your feet

    what would people think
    if they saw you name written on my arm
    if the saw all the cuts
    that wernt only on my arms

    not that you ever saw them
    its not like you would even care
    as far as your concernd
    your better when im not there

    so as i sit here thinking bout this shit
    i take another pill and prepare to give up on life
    i pick the knife up of the floor which is now all coverd in blood
    return it to my body
    and remember the one i love

    the more i love you the deeper i go
    with nothing left to stop me
    i leave life with nothing but the blood
    that i soon will drown in
    just remember i died for love

    Submitted on 2007-07-09 07:41:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I don't think your writing is crap at all. It's very emotional and full of feeling. I think what most people don't like is the language. At least, that's what I've been told when I cuss in my poetry. They don't understand that that's how we feel and it just comes out. Harsh language for the deep feelings we have. Other than that don't stop writing.
    | Posted on 2007-07-10 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]

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