Definetely like this one, nice job, as for adding to it, I would build on it, has potential to be even better
like a fractured horse put out to pasture
"broken defeated unsure (something like that is what pops into my noggin , lol)"
just throwing in an idea like you asked ;)
I like this poem very much. It is short and to the point and says something with few words which is a positive thing. There are a few spelling errors which may distract the more picky people on this site, but it's possible that maybe you misspelled them for a reason! lol! nonetheless this is a good poem.