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    dots Submission Name: Dont Want To See You Crydots
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    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 554
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    Description:
       this is an old poem i wrote for my ex after seeing him cry the first time it was something i never wanted to see again and it cut me up everytime he did cry


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    dotsDont Want To See You Crydots
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    every time i saw you cry
    a little peice of me would die
    i couldnt stand to see you upset
    you came clean with your past
    as i sat there and listend
    i tried not to cry
    i had to be strong not for me but for you
    all i wanted to do was hold you
    i felt so helpless like there was nothing i could do
    if only i could have made things better
    i promise you everything will be alright
    i understand you pain yet have no clue
    i remember the first time i saw you cry
    it put a tear in my eye
    i leant foward to wipe away your tears
    only to reveal a smile on your face
    i cant stand to imagine what youve been through
    all you should know
    is im here for you




    Submitted on 2007-07-10 09:08:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'd hate to see anyone cry. I think everyone can relate to this poem and that is what makes it a good one. Keep writing.
    Katana
    | Posted on 2007-07-10 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]


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