Aww, it love it love it love it. All I can suggest to fix are a few spelling errors, and maybe a few forced rhymes. (I love it!)
My current boyfriend asked me out the asked me out the exact same way. He was so nervous, his hands were so shaky that I could barely read his writing. : )
"with shakind hands"
"wispers give whats true"
"Do not let his fingertips part."
This didn't quite make sense to me. How would his fingertips split open? o.o I think this may be just a forced rhyme that kind of detracts from the poem.
"Hint to him the verb I left out
Between the "I" and "you" "
These are my favorite lines. They're so sweet, and I adore the way you worded. Amazing.
I think its cute how a love note is personified throughout the poem. I swear, it reminds me so much of what happened between my boyfriend and I. ^.^ It worked out extremely well for us, if that is the situation you're in, I hope it works out as well for you!