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Love Did Her wrong

Author: LadyMustang
ASL Info:    42, female, West Virginia
Elite Ratio:    4.19 - 222 /171 /71
Words: 195
Class/Type: Poetry /Broken
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Love Did Her wrong

Love Did Her Wrong

There was a time she believed in her dreams,
Now she only hears her heart's screams.

She's packed her dreams away, Her heart
doesn't dream for another day.

She use to have the courage to be strong,
Until love did her heart so wrong.

Now she only sees what is right here, Her
heart only knows it's own fear.

There was a light that shown upon her before,
Her glow has burned out doesn't shine anymore.

She doesn't know what it's like to be loved by a man
that could be true, True love her heart has never knew.

Though to love she once gave her heart and
soul, Never again will she give it control.

For only pain has it brought into her life,
It cuts right through her like a knife.

She shall never place trust within this emotion,
For no man has ever given his complete devotion.

Her heart only feels what's already in place, For
nothing could erase the stains upon her face.

Written By: Wilma Hill
copyright© July 7, 2007

Submitted on 2007-07-10 20:13:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  THIS piece is great!!! the lines went rather smoothly... and the emotions ran deep. I have been there before and can relate.
Thanks for a great read.!!!
keep up the great work.

| Posted on 2007-07-12 00:00:00 | by Magger32 | [ Reply to This ]

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