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    dots Submission Name: You are free.....dots
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    Author: forfila
    Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 354/310/188
    Words: 260
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
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        would you please do me the favor of telling me if you understand?...........


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    dotsYou are free.....dots
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    Dreaming this dream has become far more than just seeming beliefs,
    It is as if your sub conscience gained a voice and began to speak,
    Then it just continued to feed and feed on the language of your dreams.

    Nothing seems to compare,
    With all five senses impaired it's reality remains glared.

    But it is my choice not to be in despair facing the fear born out of our doubt,
    I don't just believe; I know of natures in other realms.

    In this life we have found in a heeled denial ;that flesh is tying us down,
    sitting here alive; to only be sinning and dying,
    Crying to be found.

    you can call that a negative view,
    But that is not the truth,
    The truth is that us as man; the king of relative atom combinations; as gods image through evolution and adaptation,
    We are here to divide, order, title and record the analysis of the total science,
    Our knowledge is only born out of the laws of predictability.

    But before we even evolved,
    the story was already told,
    all ready to unfold in our beautiful natures magic,
    the story is that of a purity more than minds could fathom,
    beyond any ranges of comprehension or understanding,
    But what ever happens; I say just act like time is irrelevant,
    I feel as if it's all about true intention,
    You could walk blind your whole life then learn to see in one second,
    You are free my friend and never forget that.




    Submitted on 2007-07-11 15:54:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow very... strong emotional... at first it seems to drag out but then i couldn't look awat this is deep it makes me want more the message here is amazing... great write.. :)

    ~!*Jackie*!~
    | Posted on 2007-07-23 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      Right on and woot woot!!

    I was at the river the other day and was thinking about all the bull&*%$ we will just believe and how if we just shifted our believing instantly certain things would change - yes, we are free and we are a finger of "IT" and everything stems from that relationship of energy = I believe that is what Christ tried to reveal to the world - that relationship can never be taken for it is from within and without.

    I really enjoyed this piece and thoughts do create things and intention shapes reality and life is both seen and unseen.

    Thanks and glad you had a great vacation!

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    tif
    | Posted on 2007-07-19 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Complete and replete with flashes of brilliance... I think the core message of this work is hidden in this extremely quotable line:

    You can walk blind your whole life then learn to see in one second

    So true! Freedom is a waking state of consciousness... freedom is inside us but we search elsewhere... the soul that animates the body is free and SELF is one with the soul but mistakenly identifies itself with "atom combinations" that are subject to decay and mortality...SELF has forgotten its true nature and due to ignorance it suffers...In the end, freedom lies in the realization of freedom, the recognition that it is already there.

    That's what i've understood... it may not be exactly right but this is my interpretation.

    Deep, deep work and a noble, philosophic message.

    All the best,
    -parul.
    | Posted on 2007-07-12 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]


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