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    dots Submission Name: Tarot [pt.3]dots
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    Author: whispered_chaos
    ASL Info:    15/f./cincinnati ohio
    Elite Ratio:    6.8 - 151/94/48
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 896
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    Description:
       final part of the Tarot series. once again...tell me if you think i make them one or leave them separate


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    dotsTarot [pt.3]dots
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    Shattering pulses behind the mirror,
    a blank stare reveals only my soul
    Horror subsides as the wind leaves her eyes
    reminiscent of torrid control.
    Her corpse seems to vanish beneath the glass,
    but her skin seems to swallow me whole

    "Horrid woman!" I think-I attempt to depart
    "Terrible, miserable, wench!"
    Constantly right, unwavering wisdom,
    the residue of her patience- her stench-
    Creeping steadily into my flaring nostrils,
    pulling my fists to clench.

    Hammering heartbeat wills my eyes closed,
    steady-the thud of a trudging ghost
    inching ever closer to my ailing spirit-
    To abduct what it still needs the most.
    Her hand claws at my neck, sand falls in my eyes
    She pleads for my body, the reluctant host.

    Black out in fuschia, a virtual sunset-
    Her croaking old voice hypnotizes,
    creaking through my veins like dryrotting floorboards-
    Their medley of vibration synthesizes.
    Her tawny eyes stare so deep at my face
    which she views now from the inside-
    Scolding, her laughter breaks free once more
    it's ashame I felt compelled to have lied.






    Submitted on 2007-07-11 16:22:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hello my dear dear friend alex
    i like the tarot poems and i think u should probably just leave them the way they are

    i liked this one the best, especially the last stanza,
    and the first poem was my second favorite
    | Posted on 2007-07-11 00:00:00 | by necromance | [ Reply to This ]


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