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    dots Submission Name: Cancerdots
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    Author: chilz
    ASL Info:    20/F/WA
    Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 137/147/84
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Never give up hope for those you love. You could be the one giving them strength. So strong faces and stronger hearts.


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    dotsCancerdots
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    Crawling like ivy from my throat
    It makes it's way to my heart
    Leaving a darken dead trail
    Its growing deep within my blood
    Taking over everything I love

    We pretend to no see
    What distruction it has caused
    The bruises on my life never ceased
    They were always just covered up
    A hard to forget memory forgotten

    It has made itself heard
    This last year tremendously
    You all see the pain now
    You plaster pity to your faces
    Looking at my state hopelessly

    This is what really kills me
    Not the shawdow on my soul
    But looks of those given up
    I'll fight to live another day
    You threw in my towel in long ago




    Submitted on 2007-07-11 21:20:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Crawling like ivy from my throat
    It makes it's way to my heart

    From your throat... then into your heart? I don't quite understand the way you word these things, but then again all is open to all interpretations. Is it "from your throat" as in, beginning at your throat, and then all the way down to your heart?

    I've always liked ivy metaphors.
    | Posted on 2007-07-22 00:00:00 | by Lacrimosa | [ Reply to This ]
      This write is so true
    I have lost both my Grandfather and Grandma to Cancer and you know something they only gave up on life when they saw how many other people had given up on them
    You wrote this perfectly
    You should be very proud of yourself
    This write did bring a tear to my eyes because it reminded me so much of my Grandparents plight
    Excellent Job
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get achance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-07-11 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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