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    dots Submission Name: It Doesn't Have To Bedots
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    Author: loveispain
    ASL Info:    23/f/ME
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 283/198/51
    Words: 210
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Love
    Total Views: 874
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1420



    Description:
       Just my thoughts...just what goes on in this head from time to time. ...or ALL the time...

    Watching some Dirty Dancing when I was writing this...sooo.. as Baby said...

    "Me? I'm scared of everything. I'm scared of what I saw. I'm scared of what I did. But most of all, I'm scared of walking out of this room and never feeling for the rest of my whole life, what I feel when I'm with you."

    I'd say that sums up my life in one quote.


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    dotsIt Doesn't Have To Bedots
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    I'm not living in the past,
    But, baby, the present is right.
    The closeness of lovers,
    Is nothing like the stranger,
    You are to me now.
    As "over" you,
    As I've found myself to be,
    My nights reveal the truth.
    It's only then,
    That what I can't deny,
    Haunts me in my sleep.
    What hurts the most,
    Is that this is exactly,
    How it doesn't have to be.


    Lonely,
    Doesn't do justice,
    To how absolutely alone I feel.
    A hundred smiling faces,
    And all I want is yours.
    All these men
    That don't begin to compare with you,
    And a restless feeling in this heart,
    That yearns for your touch, and your love,
    And continously questions,
    Why this is exactly,
    How it doesn't have to be.

    I'm not saying we can put it back together,
    But I have a hard time wondering,
    If we could have.
    Say the word, look at me with those eyes,
    And I would have followed you anywhere.
    It's so hard to swallow,
    This life without you,
    But I get by, I hold my head high,
    I hardly cry, but I can't forget,
    And I can't get over,
    Knowing with everything I am,
    That this is exactly,
    How it doesn't have to be.




    Submitted on 2007-07-11 21:22:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hailie I know the feeling oh so well.
    This was heart felt and it make you wonder...
    Well hope to read more from you in the future.

    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2007-11-11 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      Hailie, you write beautifully! This is an excellent, and unique, title and topic, with a story which you have managed well. The verse is alive with emotion, longing, and questioning, and you have taken the trouble to properly punctuate it, and format the story. Excellent marks from me, my lovely!
    | Posted on 2007-09-17 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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