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    dots Submission Name: in retrospect / that was realdots
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    Author: K
    ASL Info:    26/Namibia/Africa
    Elite Ratio:    5.64 - 183/172/46
    Words: 245
    Class/Type: Misc/Nostalgia
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    dotsin retrospect / that was realdots
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    It was me.

    That night…
    I drank too much.
    It was entirely my fault.

    Can you ever forgive me?

    It’s too late to take it back.
    I never meant to fall so hard;

    again.

    You are just so incredible.

    The memory of that night
    I wish I could
    forget / remember always.

    My stomach is upset.
    I feel like I’m about to throw up
    yet butterflies are all around.

    I miss you.

    It should never have happened.
    The thought alone is disgusting,
    yet I have never felt more alive my entire life.

    Thank you.

    I hate you for not saying goodbye.
    Though,
    I realise...
    I was the one that pulled away.
    Just couldn’t let myself go.
    Was too scared;
    what would they say.

    Or am I wrong?

    Was it too difficult to say goodbye?
    We connected.
    I know you felt the same.

    That day I lost you.
    That day you lost me.
    Was it worth it?
    No.
    I would rather still have you in my life.

    I miss you so much.
    Wish I could see you again;
    just hear your voice.

    Why did I drink so much?

    I’m sure my tears will dry
    and my heart will find someone new.
    Just this once,
    I wish that wasn’t true.

    One day perhaps we’ll speak again;
    maybe even be friends.
    For now...

    *sigh*





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    ||| Comments |||
      So, you had a drunken one night stand and forgot to get her number? Or she flew off to a different country afterwards? Such things happen... maybe it was only meant to happen once... that connection... before your lives went their own ways. At least, that's what I think about it all.

    Hang on, I just read it again. You cheated on your girlfriend, didn't you? Ach, I don't know what to say... it must've felt horrible the next day... and for her to find out later... ach.

    Still, were you and your presumably now ex-girlfriend meant to be together forever? Maybe this was the catalyst needed, however subconsciously, for you to both part ways. Not a nice way to go about it, but that's life, I guess.

    Not sure what to say, man. Love is a twisted b.itch at the best of times...

    Peace
    and Happy New Years
    | Posted on 2007-12-27 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]


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