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    dots Submission Name: pain and lovedots
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    Author: wilted_flower
    ASL Info:    22 f uk
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 42/56/28
    Words: 222
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 725
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    Bytes: 1341



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    dotspain and lovedots
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    In the pain my release will lie,
    Grant my wish to sleep- no urge to die,
    But to close my eyes and rest my mind
    And perhaps in the chaos my peace I'll find,
    'Cause by these talons tainted red
    More than mere words are ever said,
    Each jagged line, uneven shape
    Shows a brand new lie or a new mistake,
    So let these nails make their path,
    Burn the dragon and consume the wrath,
    And if I smile, that is when,
    I urge you 'friend' to look again,
    In my eyes you'll see my greatest role-
    The smiling girl with the twisted soul,
    And if you can love me, spirit, body and heart,
    Maybe then I'll relinquish the part,
    But tell me my dear, could it be true?
    Could you ever love me, the way that I love you?
    Fight the dragon, forgive the wrath?
    Ignore the nails and their broken path?
    Hear the words that remain unsaid?
    Stop these nails being tainted red?
    And more than that, could you ever see,
    Look beneath the facade to the real me?
    If you can, then that is when,
    Once more in my eyes you'll see the smile again,
    And if you will then I'm forever yours,
    But if you break my heart- then watch me fall.






    Submitted on 2007-07-12 15:19:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i rarely like stuff that rhymes but this was intriguing. nice job
    | Posted on 2007-07-13 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this. Just one question (probably me being stupid): what's it about?
    Ed
    | Posted on 2007-07-12 00:00:00 | by Lord Bane | [ Reply to This ]


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