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Author: explosions
ASL Info:    -237.6995/she/the library
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Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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written 2.17.07.


the microwave is loud,
magnif-eared by
the expectant ann tiss ip a shun
of a hot cup of tea
(lemon zinger)
and nothing else to do but
stare at the green digits flashing by,
magnif-eyed by
the absence of other ill oom in a shun.

it's my 3rd mug
of the day.
no sugar added,
i sip, gulp
s w a l l o w:
the liquid travels down, through my esophagus
and below to human anatomist knows where.

LIVER, spleen, kidneys, APPENDIX
pancreas, STOMACH, gallbladder
large intestine, duodenum, BILIARY TREE

(where's the body's monkey?)

all these organs can't comepair with the
great harpsichord in my head

pop quiz: do you really exist?
come on now, kids, you should've studied this last night in your reading
i guess we'll see who's really prepared

'cause what if we're all organs of
some "greater being"? (no, i'm not talking about a god)
what if we ARE the greater being?
the lungs philosophize, the heart writes books and gives lectures,
the pituitary gland is a post deliverer, the -

beep beep beep

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  harpsichordectomy, no problem one night one procedure and voila! gone forever.
favorite line- "where's the bodys monkey?"
not sure what it means but its great,funny weird funny.
this starts off very strong (love the breaking down and spelling out of the words in S1, is there a word for that? hmmm) and up until the pop quiz (i hate tests) it could be a poem on its own. the quiz part kind of threw me, i mean i suppose it works i just didn't see it coming.
you do really exist.
| Posted on 2007-10-18 00:00:00 | by eno1 | [ Reply to This ]

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