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ice suffices


Author: explosions
ASL Info:    -237.6995/she/the library
Elite Ratio:    6.87 - 59 /50 /52
Words: 113
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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whatev.
written 2.17.07.


ice suffices



frozen grapes,
stuck to the bottom of the plastic container.

they taste icily sweet on my tongue;
funny how i wear a jacket indoors,
yet eat these spheres of cold
                   fears untold

maybe i'm just trying to get so cold
   i'll freeze
'cause i'm afraid of getting burnt.

(already halfway there, their, they're)

                don't get so close to the f(i)yre
                it's a funeral pyre

lower the degrees
i sneeze:
absolute zero
('cause that's what i am, anyway)




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