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funny as in funny ha-ha

Author: explosions
ASL Info:    -237.6995/she/the library
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title taken from a smart went crazy song.
written 2.19.07.

funny as in funny ha-ha

a massive explosion:
it was the event of the decade,
as thousands, well maybe only hundreds
were plunged into the Great Unknown,
their metaphorical flames extinguished.

past went the burdened hearses
as men clad in black intoned verses

it's funny, though, 'cause it's not really real
a joke, a farce;
the preachers are costumed actors,
the mourners, paid masses.
even the flowers are plastic,
and the graves? not so grave
[cemetery – by night, necrophiles' playground]

at least that's what i think.

i wonder what they'll say when i'm
on my deathbed.
["what a fucking wannabe intellectual cynic"]
or maybe i won't have one,
maybe i'll die in a totally unexpected and
spontaneous way.
maybe i'll be more recognized in death than in life.
(now wouldn't that be funny?
yes, in a sad way)

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  ["what a [censored] wannabe intellectual cynic"]

ha!!!! I love this line. Seriously. It is just so...[censored] funny in a relative way.
I love your conversational tone, because it is so readable, casual, likeable. Real.
Irony is a strange thing and I can't help but laugh. It's like hitting your funny bone or being tickled till you pee. There is an unpleasantness underneath it all. Worse than a 'I told you so'.
Worthless comment.
Anyway, an enjoyable write. Seriously.
| Posted on 2007-11-02 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]

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