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mutiplicity of meaning

Author: explosions
ASL Info:    -237.6995/she/the library
Elite Ratio:    6.87 - 59 /50 /52
Words: 95
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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just an idea i went and ran with.
written 2.22.07.

mutiplicity of meaning

there are cracks in the ceiling, they
need some sealing

there are cracks in the sidewalk, running
through drawings in chalk

cracks, cracks, cracks
(we) make cracks about your heritage
and looks
(they) make cracks about your nerdiness
and love of books

and someday soon, you’ll crack

like the egg from which you were hatched
it came before the chicken!

and now you’ve turned to crack,
the rocks your last lifeline:
a sure sign
of your own self-destruction.
(hah, when you used to so criticize self-mutilation)

Submitted on 2007-07-12 19:37:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  geez how does something so light and funny,spunky if you will,end up so heavy?
could be a life message there i suppose.
"life is a [censored]" or something.
you really had me going,grin on my face and all.
and then a slap to the face.
thats just mean.
well i guess if thats what you were going for,well done.
good then.
| Posted on 2007-11-02 00:00:00 | by eno1 | [ Reply to This ]

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