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eat your words with your mouth closed

Author: explosions
ASL Info:    -237.6995/she/the library
Elite Ratio:    6.87 - 59 /50 /52
Words: 61
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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see the slight allusion to e
written 5.1.07.

eat your words with your mouth closed

hello mister
how do you like your half-baked idea bread

fine thanks
i play my bamboo flute between bites

i hear it's good with expectation soup

yeah with its aroma of anticipation
and a hint of hope
but masked by sensibility
lest disappointment comes and spoils it

of course of course
wouldn't be any other way

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