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    Author: unnatainable
    ASL Info:    20/F/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 48/42/23
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/
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       for the time when you turn around and go fuck he was really playing games with my mind.


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    you said this was fine
    but its nothing more than a lie
    you took and you stole
    and you always said thank you

    if i could take your breath away i would
    and id keep it till you begged for more
    you cant have me like this
    your not what i deserve

    i cant help but want you back
    and i know you will kill me again
    you hurt like its my problem
    my heart is not your play-thing

    dont promise me the world
    when you wont offer yours
    and i have three wishes
    that will see you in hell

    you cant come around here anymore
    your not welcome here
    dont play with me dont fuck with this
    THIS IS NOT A TEST




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