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    dots Submission Name: "not less because in purple i decended"dots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dots"not less because in purple i decended"dots
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    dancing & dim
    in the dull corridors
    of the secret brain,
    i think about the uncareful architectures
    of my sacrificial heart.

    the one that no longer breaks
    for the sake of colour.

    there are times, though,
    when i wish i could sink
    into some dark companion
    of heavens purple.

    but i've never trusted
    the angels in my life
    & the demons
    seem to always know
    where they are going.

    when i see you across the room,
    in the corner of my eye,
    where i hide you,
    there are still no endings,
    no resolutions
    or ultimate disavowels
    that could convince me
    that the person i met
    is not the person i see now.

    & i watch as you dance to the beat
    that i placed in your hands
    for the knowing.

    & i will always see you blushing
    in the delicate hours
    of my life.




    Submitted on 2007-07-13 22:03:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Loved it, it's awesome. Keep writing.
    ~*alexis*~
    | Posted on 2007-07-14 00:00:00 | by darkwiccan14 | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the way it was written and the good play of words. this poem could also make a good song. congrats for a job well done! :)
    | Posted on 2007-07-13 00:00:00 | by iya | [ Reply to This ]


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