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    dots Submission Name: I am almost close to deathdots

    Author: rawpot
    ASL Info:    24/M/India
    Elite Ratio:    3.83 - 383/256/84
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    dotsI am almost close to deathdots

    Stupid nagging and banging on the wall
    Crucifixion, staging, dancing mules and
    Crazy hair styles

    Friends calling me friend
    I am calling friends for company
    Lonely soul, pathetic world,

    Pulverizing thoughts,
    Production notes, targets in scrap book
    Helping hands, organizations and taxes

    Clutter, gutter and butter served with sandwiches,
    Eating, hungry,
    Busy, Crazy..

    Sorry, beauty, wonder, lust....
    All driving me crazy.
    Pain in head,
    Pain in my back,

    Lost causes and new found phone calls
    Wrong numbers, sales calls
    Pleasure in tormented,
    Torture and trouble,
    Please is pain

    Warm in bed, cold in head.
    Seductive life, horrid stance.

    I am dying and I am dying by the minutes.
    I live...

    Submitted on 2007-07-14 12:25:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very nice piece of work.....keep it up......check out somne of my work if ya want to.....anyways this is some pretty damn good work......keep writing.....sara
    | Posted on 2008-04-21 00:00:00 | by Kornfreakinabox | [ Reply to This ]
      This is put together in a very interesting way, it sort of reminds me of the punk poetry out there. It's expressive , but not overly serious. It brings a little humor to the subject, so that's a good thing for the reader. We all have areas we can better ourselves in though, and there is no such thing as a perfect poem, but the flaws in a piece are what bring out the personality of the writer, and it is that realness that I look for every time I read a poem or lyrics.
    | Posted on 2007-07-14 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]

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